Some peop/e think it is no longer necessary /'or children fo go fo school because ffiey can do all their learning on//ne. Others gei/ev’e learning in schools is essential. Discuss both views and give yot/r opinion.

People
hold different views
whether
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it is no longer necessary to send
children
to
school
. While some argue it would be better for
children
if they continue their education at
school
, I believe that everyone should focus on
children
and watch the environment they will well-grow. On the one hand, there are various reasons why
people
believe that
children
still learn well
while
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not
go
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to
school
,
instead
of they will learn online at home. The
first
is about the curriculum, now there are many online courses opened by educational
centers
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and there are full and closely follow the lessons in the
school
. In my opinion,
this
is effective in
follow
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lesson progress in
school
.
Secondly
, when studying at home, students save a lot of time, they don’t need to study subjects they don’t like and don’t need to travel much.
On the other hand
, many
people
argue that learning in
school
is essential.
Firstly
, when
children
go to
school
, they are exposed to more
people
, which can build
children
’s social skills.
Secondly
, it is easier for teachers to watch changes in learning and help overcome learning difficulties.
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