Some peop/e think it is no longer necessary /'or children fo go fo school because ffiey can do all their learning on//ne. Others gei/ev’e learning in schools is essential. Discuss both views and give yot/r opinion.

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People hold conflicting views about whether children should

study

online or go to an educational site. While being educated at

school

is a common form, I definitely agree with the former point of view. There are a number of reasons why people want to

study

school

Firstly

, parents think that when they send their children to an educational organisation the young are going to be taken care of and monitored by the teachers.

Secondly

, teachers easily control the actions and words of the students for their developing

characteristic

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and behaviour purpose.

Therefore

, by studying offline at

school

, there will be immediate communication and

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the problem quickly.

However

, there should be opinions

whether

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on whether

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the learners want to

study

onsite or offsite. The reason is that there are numerous types of crucial occasions that happen on a regular basis that require people to stay at a certain place,

that is

why

study

can attend a class.

Moreover

, studying on the internet has the benefit of recording the lessons and

then

revising them.

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students

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can save the lesson videos as subject information for test exams and learning documents. In conclusion, while attending

school

has received a wide range of agreement, I still think learning online is a good idea to be chosen.

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