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The Internet has a bigger impact on people's lives because it is more popular than television

#internet #impact #people #lives #television
TV is less popular than
Internet
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the Internet
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 due to
this
 it has the t it is
huge
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the huge
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affect
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on
human's
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human
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 life. I agree that the
internet
 has a bigger impact because it is easy
in
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to
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 use and people get a lot of information from
internet
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the internet
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 every day.
To get
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an
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access to the
internet
 is not difficult. People could use their phones,
laptops
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and laptops
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 to search
information
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for information
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 outside which they are not able to do with television .
For
example
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 if
antenna
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the antenna
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 is connected
with
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screen
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the screen
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 incorrectly,
then
 the TV will not work and the smartphone can work without any wires .
Moreover
,
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source of the most of information writing is the
internet
. As mentioned it is easy to find answers
for
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to
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user's
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users'
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 questions by using
world
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the world
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 wide web than television
,
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 because TV channels demonstrate content that allows them censorship
although
 the WWW includes a wide range of knowledge .
For instance
,
in
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Russia banned showing details of
war
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the war
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 between them and Ukraine. To conclude the
Internet
 has become very popular and has replaced television
,
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 because now people can watch any program they are interested in.
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