You want to apply for a part-time job. Write a letter to the employer. In your letter: - Introduce yourself. - Explain why you are interested in the job. - Outline your relevant experience and skills.

Dear Sharkfit Head Coach, My name is Tomás Alcaide and I am writing to you regarding the part-time job that you are offering on Linkedin for weekends.
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with, I am a Physical Therapist with a master's degree in Health and Sport Sciences from Universidad Finis Terrae obtained in October 2023.
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, I have a diploma in Cardio Metabolic Rehabilitation from Universidad de Chile which I studied in year 2018. Honestly, I am strongly interested in your offer, because I am seeking to work in a place where I can deliver all my knowledge and turn it into practice outside of the clinical field.
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, I am sure there is a great opportunity to do
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at your GYM. I have relevant experience in the training field, from directing group classes to developing personalized training programs, including special populations
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as individuals with diabetes, heart disease or any other health condition. I have done
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for 10 years. Looking forward to having your attention, and hopefully an Interview with you soon. Yours faithfully. Tomás Alcaide Santamaría

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task achievement
Make your introduction a bit more engaging. You could mention how you found the job or what attracted you to Sharkfit.
coherence and cohesion
You could add transitional phrases between your points to make the flow smoother. For example, use 'Furthermore' or 'In addition' to connect ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea. The second paragraph mixes your interest and a bit of your qualifications, so try to keep ideas separate.
task achievement
You clearly outline your qualifications and relevant skills, which makes a strong case for your candidacy.
coherence and cohesion
The closing of your letter is polite and expresses eagerness effectively, which is excellent.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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