The age of information technology has taken a lot of people by surprise. While it has become a way of life for some, others know very little about it and may be unlikely to learn. Eventually, we will have a polarized society and this will lead to serious social problems.

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In the modern world of today, we have to face new technologies on a daily basis.
Although
this
might be easy for the generations already born in
this
atmosphere, for others,
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especially elder
people
, it might be quite overwhelming. Some
people
think that
this
divergence will bring important social issues in the future. I somewhat disagree with
this
statement, as more and more elderly start to deal properly with matters related to Information Technology (IT). It is often said that some
people
will never learn how to face
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, while others (me included), think it’s just a matter of time until everyone has the basic know-how when it comes to IT. In spite of being more difficult at an advanced age to change old habits and learn from the start completely new and complex things, it is a necessity nowadays that everyone has the skills to manage a computer, a smartphone, etc. As a doctor myself, I studied that the cerebral plasticity of an older person in no way resembles that of a young child.
Nonetheless
, the cognitive capacity is there and they can still learn more or less quickly. As an example, my grandfather works
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his computer every day, even if it’s just for sending and seeing his emails. He has adapted to
this
new era and so
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many of his mates.
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, I think there is a downward trend
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a polarized society in terms of managing technology. Having said that, I don’t think there’s going to be serious social problems due to
this
in the future.
Moreover
, there’s always somebody to help the ones who still
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with the use of technology. On balance, while some
people
think it might be a huge issue that not all
people
master IT, as far as I’m concerned, that won’t be the case, since it will become the new normal
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everyone in a near future.
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