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The cost of electricity for the average household is increasing in many countries. What are the causes of this phenomenon? What are the possible solutions?

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Introduction
The
prices
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 of
electricity
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 are skyrocketing in many nations. The reasons
of
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for
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rising
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the rising
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 cost
is
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are
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shortage
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a shortage
the shortage
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 of raw material and increased dependency on
the
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apply
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electricity
electricty
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electricity
. While
this
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 problem requires urgent attention, the solutions are finding
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alternative
energy
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 sources and educating
people
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 in sustainable
energy
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 management.
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One of the biggest reason for
rising
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the rising
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 cost of
energy
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 is
shortage
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a shortage
the shortage
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 of raw material which is required to produce
electricity
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. About 60
percent
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per cent
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 of the
electricity
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are
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is
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 provided by thermal power plants which require coal to produce
energy
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.
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The coal
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Coal
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 is not easily available in all
the
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apply
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nations,
hence
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 it has to be imported from the countries
such
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 as
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Australia
Austria
Austrlia
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Australia
 or Russia.
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Furthermore
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,Furthermore
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 the local politics of the countries
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affects
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effects
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affects
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 the procurement of raw
material
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materials
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.
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For
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example
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,example
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 Ukraine and Russian
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ongoing
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on going
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ongoing
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 conflict
has
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have
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affected
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effected
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affected
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 the supply of raw
material
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materials
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. The
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overall
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over all
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overall
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 reason is
non steady
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non-steady
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 supply chain management.
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The rule of price and
demand
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 dictates that
demand
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 and
prices
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 are directly
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proportional
propotional
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proportional
 to each other which means
higher
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the higher
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 the
demand
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 higher the
prices
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.
Nowdays
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, from gas
stove
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stoves
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 to
car
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cars
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 all
the
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apply
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household products are electric based
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that has resulted in increased
demand
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of
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for
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electricity
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. The heavy dependency has caused the
prices
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 to increase at
exponential
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an exponential
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 level. Taking
example
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the example
an example
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 of electric vehicles over time take
lot
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a lot
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electricity
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of electricty
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electricty
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electricity
 to operate.
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The solution to
this
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 brewing crisis is to find alternative
energy
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 sources
such
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 as solar
energy
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, hydroelectricity and nuclear power etc.
This
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 will require
collective
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the collective
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 efforts of nations.
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Secondly
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,
people
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 should be educated in sustainable
energy
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 management as there is huge
wastage
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waste
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 of
electricity
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 due to negligence and carelessness. Government should educate
people
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 on
optimum
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the optimum
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 utilization of
electricity
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.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
government
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the government
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 should focus on
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initiatives
intiatives
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initiatives
such
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 as urging
people
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 to switch to solar
energy
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 and incentivising
people
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 for following it. The government and
people
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 should pave
a
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the
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way forward
wayforward
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way forward
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • phenomenon
  • causes
  • solutions
  • electricity
  • average household
  • increasing
  • countries
  • global demand
  • rising fuel costs
  • production costs
  • renewable energy sources
  • aging infrastructure
  • maintenance costs
  • government regulations
  • taxes
  • inefficient use
  • population growth
  • access to affordable electricity
  • competition
  • energy market
  • technological advancements
  • smart grid systems
  • consumer behavior
  • energy conservation
  • education
  • awareness
  • energy saving
  • energy subsidies
  • government support
  • energy efficiency
  • energy conservation
  • renewable energy
  • deregulation
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