The high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising but not the real need of the society where such products are sold. What is your opinion on this ?

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Advertising is a major part of marketing and promotion. It is a primary form by which organizations introduce myriad products among consumers , lure them to buy those commodities and
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increase sales and attain a profit. Critics of advertising argue that
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is the only approach to increase sales, inducing customers to purchase what they do not need in their daily life. I strongly support
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notion as it is self-evident. In the
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statement in detail. Advertisements tend to create a false perspective among the consumers that the latter are in need of certain commodities which in fact , won't be necessary at all.
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behaviour is depicted especially in the marketing of medicines, dietary supplements and life-enhancing products. folks are manipulated and often make wrong decisions and
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falls prey to these techniques.
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, energy drinks like Horlicks,Boost etc. are sold mainly for athletes and bodybuilders, but the marketing is done in
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a manner that the regular populace purchases them thinking that they have problems
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as malnutrition and use them extensively. Advertising is
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successful in creating unnecessary hype for a newly marketed product.
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, it is quite ubiquitous for individuals to purchase
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items in order to become a part of a fad.
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, the public often purchases new models of smartphones and discards their old ones even though they are in good working condition. Advertising spurs them to do so. In
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misuse their power of advertising.
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,advertisements are great in spreading awareness about the latest commodities and products often they divert from their main purpose and create a hole in the pocket. To summarize, society needs to be aware of the negative influence of advertisements as they can sometimes lead people towards the wrong trajectory and lead to unwanted expenses as well as insensible decisions.
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