Nowadays older people live in retirement homes with people their own age instead of living with their children. Is it a positive or negative development?

Older people often live in retirement homes surrounded by
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of moving in with their children. In my
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is a very positive development because elderly individuals find new connections faster and are taken care of 24/7 while the younger generation is not overcharged by them. One reason why living in retirement places is beneficial is that the elderly find connections through meeting and connecting with others who may
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the same age.
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people who come from the same time period
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helps them to relate and emphasize with each other and can build great friendships.
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inhabitants of retirement houses will feel
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less alone due to their new connections and friendships. Another reason for older males and females choosing to live in a home for seniors is that they are taken care of by nurses 24/7. While
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would be impossible to achieve if they would live with their sprouts. Reasons for that are that the younger generation has to work and does not have a lot of time to take care of the special needs of their parents or spend
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time with them.
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they often feel overcharged by their requirements.
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the elderly generation would feel alone and
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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