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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspaper or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Technology has significantly modified people ‘s lives in various ways. It is claimed that e-
books
 and news will be substituted for paper
books
 due to the cost for readers in the following years.
However
, despite the popularity of digital writing, I think the existence of physical
books
 would not be diminished.
This
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that
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 people still
to
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read actual
books
. The
first
 and foremost cause which does not affect
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the production of classic
books
 is the sensory experience. It is a unique feeling
human
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humans
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 can perceive by touching and filliping the paper pages.
To
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 my experience, it
also
 provides more concentration than
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electronic forms. In
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e-reading
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re-reading
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 one may easily get discounted by the other applications installed
into
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 his phone or tablet or by receiving text messages and phone calls. All in all, reading from paper gives genuine readers an unrepeatable experience.
Furthermore
, in spite of the fact that e-
books
 and journals are free of charge, there is a price for them only a little bit lower
in contrast
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 printed counterparts.
Thus
, many would rather purchase hardcover
books
 as their lifespan is definitely longer than digital forms stored in a vulnerable cellphone which may be exposed to
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damage simply. To summarise,
technology
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 advances
has
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 been made lives more convenient in many aspects.
Although
 e-readers have gained
a
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notable approval
amidst
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public
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, the published
books
 are still continuing to grow markedly in the numbers issued annually. In my perspective, even though there might be some
advantageous
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 to electronic
books
, the production of printed
books
 would never be exhausted.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancements
  • Digital content
  • Environmental concerns
  • Tactile experience
  • Production costs
  • Distribution costs
  • Digital divide
  • Digital fatigue
  • Print media
  • Credibility
  • Permanence
  • Collectibility
  • Aesthetic value
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