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Some people believe that government should spend money to provide faster public transport. Others think that there are other important priorities for public transport such as cost and environment.

#people #government #money #transport #priorities #cost #environment
These days improving public transports are essential for spending money on governments. A portion of
people
argue
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 that an eco-friendly environment
more
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 important than
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increasing
increaseing
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increasing
speed
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the speed
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 of public
transport
.
This
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side
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 and give my opinion. Nowadays, time is very important for all.
People
 trying
best
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 to save some time,
therefore
 everyone
choose
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most
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the most
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 efficient transportation.
Beside
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 that, traffic jam is
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overwhelming
overwhalming
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overwhelming
 during rush hour, and
people
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preferred
preffered
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prefer
fastest
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the fastest
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transportaionson
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transportations
that
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 particular time. For
this
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 some
people
 argue that government should spend more money
to
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on
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fastest
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the fastest
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 public
transport
.
On the other hand
, a proportion of
people's
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 thought
environment
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the environment
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 is more important than speedy
transport
. Their explanations are transportations affect
of
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people
's life. Vehicles produce carbon
that is
 very harmful,
also
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and also
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 creates a negative aspect
in
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 our global temperature.
Increase
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the
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 speed of
transport
 will
causes
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for
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more road
accident
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, and
increase
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an increase
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of
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in
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transport
 needs more and wider
road
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roads
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 that must be needed
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deforestation
deforestration
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deforestation
. To sum up, it is clear that speed up of public
transport
 is needed for short term
soluation
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solution
solutions
, but negative impact o=for long term. From my point of view
environment
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 is much
important
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more important
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 than
fastest
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the fastest
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transport
.
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