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The
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 glance at the line graph provided reveals the total amount of visitors and
also
 shows these divided
in
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into
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 two different activities
in
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on
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Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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island
 from 2010 to 2017. It is evident that Caribbean
island
 was more and more popular for
the
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tourists during the period. In more detail, the data of the total number of visitors only stood at 1
million
 at the beginning of the period,
following
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followed
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with
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by
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gradual
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a gradual
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 increase to approximately 2.75
million
 in 2015. After that it stayed in the
pleague
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league
plague
 for nearly 1 year, rising rapidly in the
last
 period, reaching the highest point of 3.5
million
 in 2017.
In addition
, the figures
of
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two
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the two
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 various activities
also
 had mostly upward trends. When it comes to
cruise
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the cruise
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ship
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ships
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,
this
 activity had been
unpopular
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 than staying on
island
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the island
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 for the
first
 6 years, with almost 0.25
million
 in 2010 and just over 1.5
million
 in 2015.
However
, in the
last
 year, the visitor's number exceed
than
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that
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other
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another
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 one by 2
million
 people in 2017.
In contrast
, tourists were more likely to choose
staying
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to stay
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 on
island
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the island
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 at
first
, with
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a number
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number
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numbers
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 between nearly 0.6 to 1.5
million
 people,
then
 slightly dropped to just under 1.3
million
 visitors in 2016, recovering back to 1.5
million
 in 2017.
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