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Nowadays, with advance of technology and transportation facilities, people can work and live anywhere they want. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your opinion.

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In recent years,
tech
 and
transportation
 systems have been progressing dramatically and thanks to
such
 development,
people
 have massive options to decide about their intended
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 of working and living. While
such
advancement
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advancements
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bring
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brings
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people
 some opportunities
such
 as
remote-working
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remote working
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 and connecting
people
 from different regions,
negative
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the negative
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 impact on the way
people
 communicate is undeniable. Despite
this
, in my view plus points of improvement in technology and
transportation
 industries is so valuable that the drawbacks can be overlooked. In
this
 regard,
i
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 will discuss
pros
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the pros
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 against cons as follows: There are many benefits
in
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development
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the development
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 of
tech
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the tech
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 industry and
transportation
system
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systems
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.
Firstly
, high technology
give
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 employees
the
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permission to work all
through
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over
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 the world.
this
 is to say that in
this
 tight labour market, employers show
tendency
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a tendency
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 to hire skilled workers from different countries. It’s a mutual achievement since
client
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 find
required
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 labour and workforces may make
profit
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a profit
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 from
exchange
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an exchange
the exchange
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 rate of currencies.
For example
 one of my friends live in Tehran and work from home for a company in Germany and she earns money in
dollar
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the dollar
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 which is more valuable than local currency.
Secondly
, in the past owing lack of enough facilities for
transportation
,
people
 had to live close to their workplace or stand difficulties
of
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in
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 transporting but nowadays commuting infrastructure
such
 as roads,
public
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transportation
are
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 expanded and facilitate for
people
 to work far from their offices.
for instance
, in my country instruction of
subway
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the subway
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 which connects Karaj to Tehran makes it convenient for commuters to transport.
Finally
, with
such
 mentioned pros,
beneficials
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beneficiaries
 of
tech
 and transport facilities
is
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are
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 higher than
losses
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the losses
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.
Conversely
, there are some disadvantages in
this
 regard. With
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the advance
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advance
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advances
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of
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 technology,
people
 do everything
digital
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on digital
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 platforms.
this
 is not to say that it prevents
from
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wasting time and
facilitate
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facilitates
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 many things, but it
effects
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affects
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 badly on communication style.
In other words
, social media are replaceable
of
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for
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 physical visiting. As an example, many
people
 communicate with each other through video
call
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calls
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 or chat
instead
 of
get
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 gathering or hanging out.
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In spite
Inspite
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In spite
 of
this
, the pros of
such
 improvement outweigh
cons
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the cons
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. To sum up, along with
bad
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the bad
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 effect on
connection
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the connection
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 way with
tech
 advances, there are many positive points like long-distance working and facilitation in transporting which make that makes the advantages surpass the disadvantages.
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