Nowadays, with advance of technology and transportation facilities, people can work and live anywhere they want. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your opinion.

In recent years,
tech
and
transportation
systems have been progressing dramatically and thanks to
such
development,
people
have massive options to decide about their intended
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of working and living. While
such
advancement
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advancements
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bring
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brings
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people
some opportunities
such
as
remote-working
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remote working
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and connecting
people
from different regions,
negative
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impact on the way
people
communicate is undeniable. Despite
this
, in my view plus points of improvement in technology and
transportation
industries is so valuable that the drawbacks can be overlooked. In
this
regard,
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will discuss
pros
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the pros
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against cons as follows: There are many benefits
in
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development
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the development
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of
tech
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the tech
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industry and
transportation
system
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systems
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.
Firstly
, high technology
give
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employees
the
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permission to work all
through
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the world.
this
is to say that in
this
tight labour market, employers show
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to hire skilled workers from different countries. It’s a mutual achievement since
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find
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labour and workforces may make
profit
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from
exchange
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an exchange
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rate of currencies.
For example
one of my friends live in Tehran and work from home for a company in Germany and she earns money in
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which is more valuable than local currency.
Secondly
, in the past owing lack of enough facilities for
transportation
,
people
had to live close to their workplace or stand difficulties
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transporting but nowadays commuting infrastructure
such
as roads,
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transportation
are
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expanded and facilitate for
people
to work far from their offices.
for instance
, in my country instruction of
subway
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the subway
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which connects Karaj to Tehran makes it convenient for commuters to transport.
Finally
, with
such
mentioned pros,
beneficials
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beneficiaries
of
tech
and transport facilities
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are
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higher than
losses
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the losses
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.
Conversely
, there are some disadvantages in
this
regard. With
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advance
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advances
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of
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technology,
people
do everything
digital
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on digital
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platforms.
this
is not to say that it prevents
from
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wasting time and
facilitate
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facilitates
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many things, but it
effects
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badly on communication style.
In other words
, social media are replaceable
of
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for
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physical visiting. As an example, many
people
communicate with each other through video
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calls
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or chat
instead
of
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gathering or hanging out.
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In spite
Inspite
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In spite
of
this
, the pros of
such
improvement outweigh
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the cons
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. To sum up, along with
bad
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the bad
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effect on
connection
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way with
tech
advances, there are many positive points like long-distance working and facilitation in transporting which make that makes the advantages surpass the disadvantages.
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