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4. The environment problems facing today’s world are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situations. Government and large companies should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
 believe that, in the recent modern world,
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environmental issues have become too big for ordinary citizens to handle them. Those
people
 think that only
government
 and big corporations have the
power
 to improve the current situation and there is little each of us can do. I understand where
this
 thought came from,
however
, I cannot agree with
this
 opinion a hundred
percent
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, because I strongly believe if
individual
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citizen
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citizens
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 could not change
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or
her
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 mindset,
this
 serious problem would not be fundamentally improved in
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 long run.
First
 of all, I agree that
government
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 and world-class
companies
 should lead projects to significantly improve the situation.
For example
, they are the only
power
 that can raise
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the tax
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tax
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taxes
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 to penalize institutions
who
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 do not cope with
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environmental issues. Or, they are the leading
power
 to change global infrastructure to,
for instance
, use only eco-friendly tools. Take it
for
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 example, Starbucks recently started to implement paper straws globally and American Express launched eco-friendly plastic cards.
However
, the
above mentioned
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 changes can be only successful when each individual citizen can find the efforts important and beneficial for our life and future. In most
of
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democratic
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 countries, those
government
 leaders are chosen by votes by lay
people
. Without
supports
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 from citizens, those leaders cannot keep their
power
 to change the world.
Also
, private
companies
' decisions are heavily based on their customers' needs and preferences. If we believed that those
companies
' environmental efforts were important and with merits, the
companies
' stock prices would increase and they would obtain financial
power
 to continue their activities. In conclusion,
although
 I believe
government
 and corporations need to have
leaderships
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 to
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tackle
tickle
tuckle
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tackle
these serious
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issus
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issues
issue
, at the end of the day, it is each
one
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of
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a country
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country
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citizen
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citizens
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 who should support their efforts to face the danger. Without
those
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supports
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support
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 from ordinary
people
, I think nobody can be successful in saving the earth from these serious challenges.
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