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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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These days, it's obvious that many people want to
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 for themselves, not for a
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. There are several reasons why, and
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 some downsides of being self-employed as well. Why
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 people prefer to be independent of a
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? One of the biggest reasons is the money you earn. If you belong to a
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 or organization, there is a limit to the salary you receive in most cases. When you make a special achievement or extra sales revenue, you might have some bonus or compensation. But it's mostly impossible for you to get 100% of them in return. If you are self-employed, even though you have to spend some money on management, you can earn money as much as you
work
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. The other reason is your freedom to lead
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 with your own creativity or personality. In my case, I sometimes suggest implementing more creative, aggressive and fun marketing campaigns targeting younger people in my team. But sometimes, it's not approved as my
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 has a premium identity with conservative executives. So, if you are self-employed, you can try new projects with your own creativity and responsibility. ​
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, what are the bad sides of being self-employed? The biggest factor is stability. If you are employed by a
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 or organization, the worst thing that could happen to you might be losing a job even if the
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 is bankrupted. Or, sometimes if you are a public
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 or
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 for a bigger
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, it is not easy to get fired because you are protected by the law or labour unions.
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 can't fire employees under the lever of a manager. So, if you own your business, you have to take the risk of your own bankruptcy or financial breakdown. ​In conclusion, it's obvious that being self-employed gives you lots of benefits and freedom. But at the same time, it is important to remember that freedom is not free.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • company
  • organization
  • freedom
  • independence
  • income potential
  • flexibility
  • working hours
  • working location
  • passions
  • interests
  • decision-making
  • business practices
  • disadvantages
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