Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problem.

Nowadays, people say that there are plenty of natural problems in our environment, while others believe that there are more essential issues than
this
problem, and I do not agree with
this
point of view.
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with,
last
decades
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,
lessening
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the lessening
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of plants and animals is carrying
the
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danger to our planet. Because,
earth
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the earth
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can be stable with only living organisms,
such
as
human
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humans
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, beasts,
tree
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trees
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and other living things. They support each other
live
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while fish are refreshing water,
humans
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and humans
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are treating some kind of animals. For
me
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if
this
cycle will not be soon, there will not be any other living organism and earth.
Moreover
, we can not exist without
this
cycle.
Therefore
, we have to solute urgent
this
problem that people do not always notice
about
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.
In addition
, in
this
era, we have numerous issues which face
to
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us regularly.
For example
, financial problems, lack of
work place
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and issues about our family. Even these difficulties make us more indifferent to ponder about difficulties of our surroundings, now we have to oppose
to
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cases about damaging nature and hunting animals to our future pleasant and defended environment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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