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The bar graph illustrates the worldwide sales of four various kinds of computerized
games
 from the
year
 2000 to 2006. Overall, it can be visible that handheld
games
 accounted upward trend throughout the
period
. Whereas, Console
games
 recorded a downward trend in a given
period
.
To begin
 with handheld
games
, only 13
billion
dollars
games
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 were sold out in the
year
 2000 and
this
 figure
was
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steadily increased in between the
period
 and peaked
nearly
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 18
billion
dollars
 in the
year
 2006, which was
the
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exceptionally higher selling followed by other years.
Moreover
, in the
year
 2000 consoles were sold out by almost 6
billion
dollars
, which
was
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dropped by 3
billion
dollars
 in 2006.
Although
, the trading of console
games
 remained equal in 2003 and 2004, which was nearly 4
billion
dollars
 in both years.
Furthermore
, the least amount of online
games
was
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sold in 2001 was only 1
billion
dollars
 and
this
statistics
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was
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steadily expanded by 1
billion
dollars
 till the
year
 2005 and climbed up
by9
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by 9
billion
dollars
 in 2006. As similar to online
games
 the highest selling of mobile phone
games
 was seen at end of the
period
 around 7
billion
dollars
, which was quite a high amount as compared to other years.
In contrast
, the minimal selling of that game was around 2
billion
dollars
 in 2002.
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