Some parents buy their children a large of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?

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children

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a lot of

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to play with them. Some people including me, believe that buying numerous

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is not a suitable method for

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will be a good approach. Providing different

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for your baby could lead to some serious problems.

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has a dangerous effect on the nature and

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prices are

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very high and you need to spend

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of your budget, but with reasonable

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save your money and spend

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education or took that for their future. Different and

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make the home busy. As your child be smaller

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worse

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and it will be so difficult to

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them day after day.

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if parents always buy

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want

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their personality badly and they think they

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everything they want and in their adulthood maybe they become

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of society and experts believe that buying a large number of

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appropriate way. They

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can improve

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creativity

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complicated

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makes them smarter and

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ready for their future.

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are a way of communication between

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and if they have numerous

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they will be able to play together and

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social interactions. They

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said with various

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children

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will be more satisfied and they will be happier. In conclusion,

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even though

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am agree

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with some comments which

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mentioned above about buying large scales of

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wrote in the

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paragraph it is crucial to have

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tolerance because

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overindulgent

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Some parents buy their children a large of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?

Fully explain your ideas

In many countries goverments are investing in new technology to deal with the public. Why is this happening? Do you think this is an appropriate use of goverment money?

Some people believe that arts (such as painting and music) do not improve people’s life therefore the government should not spend money on it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard in studies. what are the causes and its solution?