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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic? What are the benefits and disadvantages of this?

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Nowadays a lot of people are travelling to
the
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places
 with extreme
conditions
 like
Sahara
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desert
 or the Antarctic and it is a benefit as they are able to see some breath-taking scenery our
world
 has to offer but as they are unprepared for
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 in the climate, few of them suffer serious injury or even death. Due to the advancement in technology, humans can now reach
to
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any corner of the
world
 within
few
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 days and visit
places
 which we have never seen before like a
desert
 in Africa or
to
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a continent like Antarctica, which is all made up of ice. Since globalization, people started travelling all over the
world
, which has created congestion in
the
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popular tourist destinations and because of that tourists are more interested in exploring
the
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unknown
places
.
For Instance
, several people are going to Antarctica during peak winter, which is one of the coldest
place
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 in the
world
 to experience the unique wildlife like a penguin or a polar
bear
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bears
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. These
type
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 of animals are rarely seen in other parts of the
world
 and
this
a
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great advantage of travelling to
places
 with difficult
conditions
.
However
, going to
the
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places
 with harsh
conditions
 without preparation is a severe health risk. Tourists need to gain knowledge about the place like a
desert
otherwise
 it causes damage to their physical health or even
kill
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 them.
For example
, we need to carry enough water if we are going to a
desert
, where
ambient
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the ambient
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 temperature is above 50 degree Celsius during
daytime
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 and because of lack of water, we can die due to dehydration. Not understanding the
conditions
 of
the
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places
 with
harsh
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climate
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 is the biggest disadvantage for tourists. In conclusion, Visiting unexplored
places
 can show you some beautiful scenery hidden from the
world
 but not having enough knowledge about the environment there before departing can be
a
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very harmful.
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