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Nowadays internet addiction become trend discuss about causes and effects for this problem?

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The
internet
 has revolutionized our modern lives and has made them more convenient in comparison with ancient times.
However
,
Internet
 addiction is rapidly growing among all ages, particularly adolescents, and brings destructive consequences
such
 as increased anxiety, and health issues.
To begin
 with, the main reason for addiction to modern technology might be a lack of parental monitoring.
In other words
, it is implausible for parents to devote enough time to their children due to the stressful lifestyles they have.
Therefore
, teenagers become overdependence on social platforms
such
 as Instagram, and Facebook and spend most of their time there.
For instance
, according to a survey which was released by Cambridge University a lack of parental guidance was the main reason for joining children in the virtual
world
 and following strangers' lifestyles rather than caring about their lives. On the other side, health issues, and depression are considered significant problems for
internet
 addiction. Spending too much time on these platforms could affect their bodies and could lead to a sedentary lifestyle.
Thus
, pupils might become obese or the harmful light of the phone’s screen increase the strain on their eyes. Obviously, in the modern
world
 juveniles have expanded their personal relationships in the virtual
world
 rather than the real
world
, and
this
 situation has diminished face-to-face communication.
As a result
, these groups of people become more and more isolated from the community. In summary, despite the fact that the
internet
 has enhanced our lives in the modern
world
 if youth are addicted to it, they will develop a variety of problems. There are several things that should be considered for it, including health issues and anxiety.
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