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Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. Why do you think this is the case? Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

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People
 around the world prefer to wear stylish clothes. In my opinion,
style
 is one of the most important things in
modern
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 world which is not only
helpful
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 to make a
person
 more attractive but is
also
can
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an
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emphasis
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 some individual
trait
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 and introduce a personality.
To begin
 with, wearing
fashionable
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 outfit make a
person
 feel more confident in society. Feeling
yourself
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attractive and good-looking
have
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 a great impact on an individual’s mood.
For example
, those who are working in
office
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on
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 high positions have to follow
formal
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a formal
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style
 in clothes for a special purpose. Namely, it creates a working atmosphere rather
more
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than if there
was
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 no
any
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style
 requirements. In my opinion, following
style
 novelties is
very
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 important
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habit
habbit
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habit
. There is a fact that
people
 have their
first
 expression while scanning how a
person
 is looking.
For instance
, if an individual looks strange and their clothes
is
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are
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 old-fashioned or weird, probably the majority of us will think that a
person
 is mad
while
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 that might be not the truth.
Therefore
,
think
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 twice while choosing what to wear is essential.
On the other hand
, sometimes
people
 pay too
many
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 attention
on
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 how they look like while they forget to develop their personality.
For example
, there are some individuals who would sell everything they have if there was an opportunity to buy a rare item to complete their look.
Consequently
, it is better to find a golden mean in a
style
 and some personal qualities. To conclude, many of us find
vital
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 to have a stylish outfit because it helps to influence
on
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employees and create a
first
 impression on strangers. Personally, I think that
people
 who look
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fashionable
fashonable
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fashionable
 can
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feel
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fell
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feel
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 more relaxed while their look helps them to feel
confidence
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confident
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.
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