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•In some countries, some of the criminal cases in the low courts are shown on the television, so that the general public can watch them

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There is no denying the fact that publishing criminal
cases
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 on tv is always arguable. While it is commonly held belief that penalties should be heard by the public, other people see that some
cases
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 need to stay private.
This
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 essay will discuss the benefits and disadvantages of showing trials on television.
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, the main goal for every government is
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 the number of crimes in
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society, and one of the successful methods is to inform the large public about the danger of every act and its penalty,
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 why tv presents the best device, another point is the possibility for the victims and their families to follow their
cases
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 at home which make them feel more secure and give to the trials more transparency.
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 of all, there are
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 several disadvantages, as
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example, every criminal has an innocent family behind him, publishing his case which could be a simple mistake, means publishing
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 his identity, which guarantees
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the whole family a bad reputation inside the community.
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, the fact of showing a criminal’s identity could present a real danger for his social entourage by someone who tries to revenge. To conclude, many countries see that citizens have the right of assisting criminal
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,
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 act has its advantages and its challenges, which is the reason why governments need to select carefully what they publish and take the necessary measures for that.

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