In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

In today's world,
economy
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and
money
have a huge
place
in our society and daily lives. Most
people
tend to save
money
in order to
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buy
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their own houses and they think that
this
is a better option than renting someone else's home.
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essay will try to find the reasons
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this
idea and
also
provide information on its positive effects. Especially in some bigger cities, it's extremely important for some
people
to live in their own
place
. One of the
reason
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for
this
may be providing their children
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better future. Parents can feel less worried about their
child
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children
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if they know their
child
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children
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have a
place
to live after they pass away. While doing
this
, having a house can
also
be a very good investment. In critical times like economical
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or unemployment,
this
can provide
a
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comfort for most
people
. Apart from
this
, it is less likely for an
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accommodation
accomodation
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accommodation
to lose value rather than gain. These two
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ideas
idead
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ideas
may be the reasons why
people
try to own a home, but there are
also
positive aspects regarding
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this
behaviour. A plan like
this
needs
money
, and
this
dream of some
people
encourage
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them to save more. Working for an investment like
this
needs high amounts of
money
and one can be more mature while trying to achieve his or her dream. And
finally
, when they accomplish
to have
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their own
place
, they don't have to worry about rent or other expenses. These
people
can live a more peaceful life. In my opinion, it's reasonable to have
this
kind of dream, because owning a house is a well-earned investment that needs saving and it provides a stress-free life for
people
who are able to achieve it.
People
can spend their savings
this
way, so they don't have to worry about when or how they will have to move from their rented apartments.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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