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Some people fail at school, but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is the most important thing to succeed in life?

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school students or the successful artists who could hardly read in their youth. In
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success in life. In order to assess students’ knowledge supporters of
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future life in the real world. Indeed, had
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future great achievements, there would be many more successful people all around the world.
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success in life depends on some skills and features of a personality rather than scientific knowledge and good marks at school.
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