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More and More people are using mobile phones and the internet to communicate. therefore, people are loosing their ability to communicate face to face. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Nowadays, most
people
 are communicating through cell phones because of
this
, daily interaction among
people
 is dramatically decreasing.
This
 essay completely agrees with the given opinion the reasons being, due to
lack
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a lack
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 of direct interaction among the public, society might become selfish and end up with psychological disorders. To
being
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be
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 with the
first
 cause of agreement with the given opinion, direct communication is much more essential among the
people
 for helping
the
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apply
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society and not to live in
the
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a
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 self-centric lifestyle. In ,society one should offer his or her financial or moral support when the other person is in need. For ,instance the Guardian published an article,
clearly
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that clearly
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dicipiates
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dictates
 that the because of the lack of direct communication the country's hunger index rose by ten per cent.
Secondly
,
people
 who do not show up interest in discussing
their
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 good and bad with others may face some kind of mental problems. Most of the
people
 who are visiting psychiatrists are those who have
this
 introverted
personalities
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personality
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.
This
 can be evident with the grandparents at home, because of the advanced lifestyle of humankind, grandparents at home are left alone and no one cares about their mental stroma and stress. To conclude,
this
 essay argued that due to a lack of direct interaction, how
people
 would become greedy and mentally retarded.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proliferation
  • facilitated
  • convenient communication
  • geographical barriers
  • eroded
  • social skills
  • digital divide
  • increasingly isolated
  • digital communication platforms
  • complement
  • mitigate
  • perceived decline
  • in-person communication
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