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Are we too dependent on antibiotics? Discuss both sides and goive your own opinion.

#antibiotics #goive
Have you ever pondered about being reliant on
antibiotics
? In recent years the use of
antibiotics
 has increased significantly among individuals. With our busy lifestyles, we
tend
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 opt for a quick fix to our ailments including a headache and
this
 often
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involves
involues
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involves
 a pill of some kind
instead
taking
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 rest and drinking some fluids. Many
claim
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 that without those
antibiotics
, we would have died of "Little” diseases and our life would have been a lot harder. One of the main advantages of taking
antibiotic
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antibiotics
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 is
antibiotics
 are effective in treating or preventing them from spreading and slowing the growth of infection.
Therefore
,
antibiotics
 are fast acting - some will begin working within a few hours and
easy
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 to take. Most
antibiotics
 are oral medications. You swallow,
they
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 cure.
However
, there are several disadvantages to being dependent on
antibiotic
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antibiotics
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 and taking
too
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 often it. Frequent use of
antibiotics
 can lead to resistant bacteria which
is
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are
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 harder to treat.
This
cause
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antibiotics
 to become less effective. In fact, a 2019 CDC (Centers for
disease
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 Control and
prevention
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) found that in the US (United
states
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), more than 2.8 million antibiotic-resistant infections occur each year,
more
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and more
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 than 35000 people die
as a result
.
Moreover
 , there are high possibility of side effects,
such
 as mild rashes, pain in your stomach, and
feeling
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 of being sick, in overuse of
antibiotics
. All in all,
the
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antibiotics
 are surely one of the most important and necessary
need
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needs
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 in human life,
although
 overuse of
antibiotics
 can be harmful
for
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 us. So take it only when necessary with pharmacists' or doctors' advice.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dependence
  • antibiotics
  • health outcomes
  • bacterial infections
  • preventive measures
  • surgeries
  • control
  • infectious diseases
  • integrated
  • dentistry
  • dermatology
  • overuse
  • misuse
  • antibiotic resistance
  • global health concern
  • inappropriate use
  • side effects
  • alternative treatments
  • holistic approach
  • healthcare
  • invest
  • research and development
  • awareness campaigns
  • public understanding
  • proper use
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