In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and expenrience

In
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recent decades, more and more old
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chose to live with others in
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nursing house. But the hotly debated topic is the government or the family should pay for
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fee
. From my point of view, I think the family should pay
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this
fee
because of some reasons that I mentioned in
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First
and foremost, family members have to be responsible for their parents and grandparents. In
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way of saying, taking care of
people
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is a tradition and gratitude to them and
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fee
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for
nursing
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house.
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, in Vietnam, grandparents almost live with their children and grandchildren in the nuclear family, if old
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live nursing home, the family will pay
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for
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. Moving on
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point, if the government have to pay
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for living in a nursing home for
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old
people
,
this
will put pressure on the state budget. It means that the government’s budget is used to pay for more suitable things
such
as
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unemployment benefits, health insurance,
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for the poor, … To jump to
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, the family should pay
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a fee
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fee
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for
living
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the living
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of old
people
in the nursing house.
This
shows the responsibility of the members and reduces pressure on the state budget.
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