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Today, more and more people use robots to do tasks at home and at work. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? Why?

#people #robots #tasks #home #work #development
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, more and more individuals utilize
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 to do
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 a job. Do be of the view it is
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 affirmative or damaging evolution? Why? In my opinion, it is positive to use
robots
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 better growth of the country and an easier life to live with. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss my
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 the one hand, it should be taken into
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consideration that
robots
 are priceless helpers in managing several tasks at home and at work at the same time. They always rescue us in
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 situations.
Also
, with the advent of
such
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 of
robots
 most people have an opportunity to spend time with family,
friends
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,
studies
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, personal development as well as
relaxing
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.
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,
cleaning
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 process, printing and cooking can be done simultaneously just with the help of pressing relevant buttons. 
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 the other hand, completely relying on gadgets at home and work can be both negative and dangerous. There are several
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 that can prove
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Firstly
, the provision of electricity is not satisfactory in most parts of the world.
Besides
 that, not all people can manage using
robots
 successfully.
For example
, old people
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predominately
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 fail how to use them, and children are not allowed to use
robots
 alone.
Although
 there is a myriad of
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positive side to
robots
, it still has negative effects on human. In conclusion, As I mentioned above
although
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positive
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 to
robots
, it still has negative effects on
human
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. I believe that we could balance
this
 problem with technology in the future.
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