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Today, more and more people use robots to do tasks at home and at work. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? Why?

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• In our modern life, technology has been proven to be a revolution in almost every day type of industry and several works that
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 I will discuss the negative and positive developments of mechanisms doing the job and home tasks done by humans • There are a number of positive effects of using
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they are exceedingly fast-moving and they can
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 of the human race and they save time and
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 convenient to use,
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 parties and other celebration and they have to went to the house of their guests to
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 positives it
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 of people and they are facing several serious health problems. An example of
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 to having machines do their
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 to increase productivity in general.
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