Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugars which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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Today several alimentary

products

contain a high percentage of mostly refined sugars,which probably cause numerous health issues.While the manufacturer's ethical background and social participation should be taken into consideration, I personally believe that certain unhealthy

products

should be taxed.

Firstly

, I find that most of our choices are made spontaneously.

As a result

, raising unhealthy product prices will make us rethink our purchasing decisions .

For instance

, fresh natural refreshing lemon juice costs 3 bucks, while a Pepsi bottle usually costs one dollar.

Secondly

, I agree with applying taxes on certain

products

as it should raise awareness about how damaging

this

product is .I should

also

emphasise that

this

attempt could be rough for those companies and the whole county’s economic state.

This

is because these manufacturers actively employ thousands of workers nationally.

Therefore

, the health tax should be reevaluated annually according to the company's social participation. It will

also

be great if the money from the taxes is put into research to find healthier refined sugar alternatives. To sum up ,taxing certain

products

will be a huge step for healthier communities , as it raises awareness and encourages us to look for healthier alternatives. I believe

also

that better attempts could be done.

For instance

,cooperating with the manufacturers to find healthier alternatives for sugar . and to force them to show how damaging their

products

are to the public.

Submitted by m.mahmoud.2005 on Tue Dec 06 2022

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