Some people think the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, think there are better alternative ways to reduce crime. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Imprisonment
is one of the most common Use synonyms
way
to force Change to a plural noun
ways
people
after they are arrested because of their criminal actions. Some Use synonyms
people
believe that by giving longer prison Use synonyms
sentences
to Use synonyms
the
prisoners, the Correct article usage
apply
crime
Use synonyms
rate
could be reduced. Use synonyms
However
, others think that there are Linking Words
more
alternative ways to have the criminal rates Correct quantifier usage
apply
declined
. From my perspective, I can’t agree more with the idea of treating Wrong verb form
decline
criminals
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by
other ways, not by longer Change preposition
in
imprisonment
time.
On the one hand, many Use synonyms
people
believe that, by giving longer Use synonyms
sentences
to prisoners, Use synonyms
government
can reduce the Add an article
the government
crime
Use synonyms
rate
in its country. Use synonyms
This
is because they state the approach may act as Linking Words
Correct your spelling
deterrent
Correct article usage
a deterent
deterent
which can discourage would-be Correct your spelling
deterrent
criminals
or Use synonyms
people
who want to break the laws. Use synonyms
For
the short term, Change preposition
In
this
action may cause a psychological effect Linking Words
to
would-be Change preposition
on
criminals
so that they will avoid making wrong decisions. Use synonyms
However
, the idea is not really rational according to many reasons. We should know that the roots of offences Linking Words
just
because some Add a missing verb
are just
people
have to live Use synonyms
in
a low-quality of life, so they have no choice but to be Change preposition
apply
criminals
, to help themselves survive. Use synonyms
Moreover
, Linking Words
this
idea is not really effective to address other kinds of crimes, like petty crimes Linking Words
that
Correct word choice
where
criminals
won’t need to face Use synonyms
imprisonment
Use synonyms
sentences
. So Use synonyms
this
may lead to an increase in the Linking Words
rate
of Use synonyms
crime
, which is opposite Use synonyms
with
the main purpose.
Change preposition
to
Otherwise
, I firmly believe that there are more efficient methods to reduce Linking Words
criminal
rates rather than increase Replace the word
crime
imprisonment
time. And education might be one of the best ways. With education, Use synonyms
people
can be taught about laws, policies and the impact of their bad behaviours Use synonyms
to
others, including their relatives, their friends, etc. So the knowledge can be spread out to many Change preposition
on
people
, to help them improve awareness about negative effects when they try to break the laws, Use synonyms
understand
Correct word choice
and understand
about
different Change preposition
apply
sentences
for Use synonyms
distinguish
Change the verb form
distinguishing
kind
of Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
criminals
. In fact, Use synonyms
criminals
who Use synonyms
has
been educated in jails Change the verb form
have
are
rarely to re-offend, so that Unnecessary verb
apply
mean
education has both 2 pros. Replace the word
means
Additionally
, I Linking Words
also
think that government should concern about social Linking Words
Correct your spelling
welfare
wellfare
policies. By increasing the minimum Correct your spelling
welfare
wages
, or having a budget to help the poor, the living standard may be improved. Fix the agreement mistake
wage
Therefore
, Linking Words
people
have Use synonyms
less
chances to commit a Change the quantifier
fewer
crime
, which leads to Use synonyms
the
decrease Correct article usage
a
of
Change preposition
in
crime
rates. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, Linking Words
government
should approve policies to help unemployed Add an article
the government
people
, especially those who have just finished serving their Use synonyms
sentences
, so that they can be helped with social integration. As you might experienceUse synonyms
that
, in some developed countries with Correct word choice
apply
the
high living standards, the Correct article usage
apply
rate
of Use synonyms
criminals
is less than in some under-developed countries.
In conclusion, giving longer Use synonyms
sentences
to prisoners might be an effective deterrent in short term, but to be ready for Use synonyms
a
long run, we should have some alternative methods Correct article usage
the
instead
.Linking Words
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