Although families have influence on a children’s development, factors outside the home play a bigger part in their lives nowadays. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, growing up as a child has more impact from aspects outside the family. offspring having more a sociale live beside school.

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the world is bigger than school and home for them because the use of

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. I completely agree that heir having more people guiding them because their spend more time outside the house. I

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believe that the social media having shock on offspring.

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, scion having a busy schedule beside going to school. By doing outside activities, offspring get in contact with others.

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: going to a soccer club. By going to a soccer club the heir having practice 3 times a week and a game in the weekend. That means more than 6 hours outside the house with other kids and coaches.

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, the

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has become an enormous resion on offspring development. They get a lot of information from there which has many effects on them,

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its been said that every coins has to aspects on one hand it might be good and

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it might bad.

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: by using

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they do play videogames,

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, they can use a google option where they can find any kind of information just at one fingertip whether its related good or bad knowledge. In conclusion, above mentioned both views uphold their own value and effect i would say

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, there is no doubt that in

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generation offspring are being affected by

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worldwide in their developement rather than their family.

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: in today's world

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, mobile phone, laptop, night Bars and other places which are brutely influencing our scion development.

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Topic Vocabulary:

Proliferation
Media
Technology
Peer influence
Extracurricular activities
Educational institutions
Character building
Social norms
Global community
Cultural exchange
Marketing
Advertising
Preferences
Values
Government policies
Standardized education
Child welfare programs

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As the result of tourisms and the incresing number of people traveling, there's an growingh demand for more flights. What problems does it have on the enviroment? What measures could be taken to solve the problem?

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