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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge

#people #choices
A group of
people
 opines that at present, we have lots of opportunities to select. I completely agree with
this
 proposition and will discuss relevant points along with precise examples and back up my view.
First
 of all, nowadays we get many
products
in
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from
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 different brands, which was not possible
few
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a few
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 decades ago so
that
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apply
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we have many
option
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options
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 to
choice
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choose
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 anything.
For example
, most
of
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apply
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the
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people
 would buy only Nescafe coffee many years ago, because they were no other companies available, but consumers are now buying different brands
products
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of products
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 according to their choice.
Secondly
, at present
human
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humans
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 are living luxurious
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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 than before,
as a result
,
people
 have
ability
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the ability
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 to buy any
products
 which were not possible
to
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apply
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decades ago.
For instance
,
century
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a century
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 ago
world
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the world
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 did not develop industrialization,
as
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and as
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 a consequence,
people
 did not have
scope
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the scope
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 to work despite their willingness.
However
 now
public
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the public
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 can earn money because of available work opportunities which help them to choose materials.
Moreover
,
people
 are now well educated, so
that
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apply
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they can easily discriminate
in
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between
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 different
products
,
hence
, they can easily choose many
products
 according to their needs.
Moreover
, now
communication
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the communication
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 system is excellent
which
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and
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help
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helps
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 to transport goods anywhere,
as a result
,
people
 get many options to select
.
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from.
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 to illustrate, 50 years ago Bangladeshi
people
 did not know Western development
country
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countries
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 without
Middle
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the Middle
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 East
,
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apply
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 so
that
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apply
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most of the migrants went to Saudi Arabia.
However
,
public
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the public
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 are now educated, so they want to go USA or UK because they
also
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are also
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 developed countries. in conclusion, now a group of
people
trusts
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trust
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 they have more than one option to select and
the
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they
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enjoying
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enjoy
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 these facilities so I restate my opinion again and proved that.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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