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Some people believe that children’s leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are a waste of time. Do you agree or disagree? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant example from your experience.

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It is a popular saying that all work and no play make jack a dull boy. Some people claim that children's extra-curricular
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 need to have an educational purpose
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 they are merely a waste of
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. I believe
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 is far from the truth and that these
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 contribute to
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 better development of kids. In
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 of all, the benefits of different types of games have been demonstrated
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 and
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 important role in preparing children for their future in regard to non-academic skills. Strategic games
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 as chess help develop problem-solving abilities that will prove helpful in other areas of kids' lives in their adult life.
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, careers in business like the stock market demand people with
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 type of critical thinking and capacity to think on their feet.
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, physical
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 should be highly encouraged as they provide clear health benefits mitigating the odds of sedentary life-related illness.
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, it has been shown that in countries where
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school offers more hours of physical education per week, there is a smaller percentage of obesity and diabetes.
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 promote the improvement of communication abilities, essential in both personal and professional future aspects of life. In conclusion, children's extra-curricular
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 should be looked at as an asset and not a waste of
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 because they contribute just as much to their development.
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