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All education and healthcare should be funded by the government and free for everyone To what extent do you agree or disagree with this option?

#education #healthcare #government #option
Nowadays, many countries offer free
education
 and healthcare for all the residing people. As per my knowledge , I agree with
this
option
 for a better life for everyone. I will explain
more
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in detail the former view.
Firstly
 , I'm explaining why
i
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 agree with
this
option
 of free
education
 and health care is raising the nation for all the people equally.
For example
 , if anyone suffering from chronic
diseases
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disease
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and
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may not bare the cost of treatment and
this
option
 will help them to come out of the situation as well as free
education
 will help the students to grow equally without any differences.
Secondly
 , these offerings will increase the country's costs and
country
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 needs to remain to collect taxes from the
taxpayers
.
For example
 , the facility will help the public more but not only the
taxpayers
. I believe , most
taxpayers
 may not be interested in
this
option
. In
case
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the case
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 of non-free health care and
education
 , the government may come forward to look after alternatives . In summary , I personally
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agree
toagree
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to agree
agree
this
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 free
education
 and health care as it helps many other people who can not
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afford
Stafford
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afford
itafford
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 . But , it may be a continuous burden on
taxpayers
.
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