2.In today's modern world, industry and technology are taking over in life. However, we cannot underestimate the value of art and artists, such as painter, writer, singers... In your opinion, what does art teach us that technology cannot?

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and

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are developing more and more. But a hotly debated topic is what

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can teach

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but

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cannot. From my point of view, I have a few some comments that I mentioned in

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and foremost,

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gives

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a lot of emotions

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as: happy, angry, anxious, …that

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cannot. In another way of saying, when

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read books, listen to music or watch film emotion change according to the content and the character

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enjoy. It means that,

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like: mobile phone, laptop, TV that help our life easier and more convenient but it does not bring much feeling.

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, a research by Hanoi National University in 2021 shows that 75% of student who study

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major

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as: writing, painting, singing… will be more emotional than

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learners. Moving on the

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point,

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play important role in our life that motivate for

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. By that, I mean, the stories of the writers’ lives are proof that

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do not accept fate. In others words, only when enjoying

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come across situation like themselves and learn to overcome difficulties. To jump to conclusion,

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can teach

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many things that

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cannot. Cart help us have much emotion that make our life more value and remind us to always overcome painfulness.

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Lexical resource: 7.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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2.In today's modern world, industry and technology are taking over in life. However, we cannot underestimate the value of art and artists, such as painter, writer, singers... In your opinion, what does art teach us that technology cannot?

Fully explain your ideas

In many parts of the world, water sources are becoming more polluted. discuss the problems and the solutions

It is as important to teach children to protect the environment as it is to teach them to read and write. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some parents think that children should do extracurricular activities. Others think that this will give them pressure. Discuss both views and give your opinion