International travel is becoming cheaper and more and more countries are opening door for it. Does the advantage outweight its disadvantage.

International travel nowadays is cheaper and a lot of countries are welcoming
the
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foreigner.
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Belows
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are the
benefits
and
drawbacks
of
this
statement.
First
and foremost, let's talk about the advantages.
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A country
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Country
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that
opening
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the door
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door
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doors
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for international travel will get
new
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a new
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source
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sources
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of income for themselves and if more and more
foreigner
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foreigners
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come to their
country
it will be nice for their economy. Income from
the
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travellers
increase
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the
country
's gross domestic product and
impact
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the
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economic growth.
Moreover
, with more people coming to their
country
, small and medium
enterprise
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enterprises
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around the
tourist
attraction may feel
direct
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a direct
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impact
to
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their revenue. Their income will increase and they will have bigger buying power.
On the other hand
, there are several
drawbacks
that followed. With the decision of the
country
opening
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to open
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door
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the door
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for tourism, sometimes they have to sacrifice their citizens. In
venice
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for instance
, because
of
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the main attraction is in
their
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city
center
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,
their
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citizens who live there must
relocated
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to the suburbs just
to
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spoiled
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the travellers and use the city for
tourist
attraction.
In addition
,
culture
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a culture
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that
brought
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by
tourist
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tourists
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less or more will affect the
locals
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tradition. Sooner or later, small
culture
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cultures
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will be influenced by the
tourist
and no longer
remembered
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by the
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citizens
citizend
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citizens
and end up with extinction. In conclusion, with all the
benefits
and
drawbacks
listed, the
benefits
is still outweigh
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the
drawbacks
since the advantages make people in one
country
more
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survive than before.
Also
, the
benefits
can help the economic growth
for
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the
country
.
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