Sales companies often try to recruit people who are motivated by money, as they believe that it will make them work harder. do you believe people are motivated to work hard by money and what other factors should be considered when searching for new sales staff?
Sales companies try many times to hire
people
who are motivated by money because they believe it will make them work harder. Deep in my heart, i
do not believe Change the capitalization
I
to
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apply
this
statement. Perhaps this
true
in some way but not most of it. There are several Add a missing verb
is true
argument
for Change to a plural noun
arguments
this
reason and also
i
will try to list the factors needed when searching Change the capitalization
I
new
sales Change preposition
for new
staff
.
First
, if we recruit people
who are motivated by money, maybe they will highly
motivated at Add a missing verb
be highly
first
. But when they think the salary they got from the company is not worth enough with what they give, that staff
won't be as motivated as before and will impact their performance in the near future. Moreover
, Money-oriented staff
does not put their customer experience and Add a hyphen
after-sales
after sales
as their Add a hyphen
after-sales
first
priority, meanwhile
they will try to acquire Add a comma
,meanwhile
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a customer
customer
as much as possible that will end up Fix the agreement mistake
customers
left
a bad image for the brand due to poor customer service. So Change the form of the verb
leaving
hire
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hiring
people
who are motivated by money is a big no.
In contrast
, there are several factors and criteria
we can use for recruiting people
. First
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The first
criteria
is honesty. Hiring honest Fix the agreement mistake
criterion
staff
makes us do
not have to worry about their performance because we can trust them in their work despite Unnecessary verb
apply
of
the salary they get. Change preposition
apply
Secondly
, the criteria
is
to search Change the verb form
are
someone
who has Change preposition
for someone
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integrity
intergrity
, someone who Correct your spelling
integrity
walk
the talk. If we can get that kind of Change the verb form
walks
people
we do not have to worry because they will do exactly as Fix the agreement mistake
person
what
they say. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Last
but not least is search
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to search
someone
with high responsibility, with Change preposition
for someone
this
factors we can get Correct determiner usage
these
people
who responsible
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are responsible
of
their work and won't Change preposition
for
left
their job undone. If we can get Change the verb form
leave
be left
a
new Correct article usage
apply
staff
with these Correct your spelling
criteria
criterias
, rest assured the companies will grow bigger and larger in no time.
In Correct your spelling
criteria
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conclusion
conlusion
, hiring new Correct your spelling
conclusion
staff
need certain criteria
which can make the companies better in the long term. Not just money-oriented staff
who increase revenue in the short term. Search staff
who have honesty, responsibility and integrity just so the company can grow.Submitted by matlbert20 on
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