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Recently most of the people showing their interest to migrate in cities rather than villages and towns. Discuss both sides and provide your conclusion.

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Nowadays most of the population is interested in living in
cities
 rather than in villages and towns. I believe that
this
 is the truth, because, at the moment, most of the opportunities given to society are provided by
cities
. Juveniles belong to the group of
people
that is
 really interested in moving out to
cities
. They, in fact, believe that in these big realities there are many more opportunities for their future.
Therefore
, many undergraduate students tend to move from their small towns towards bigger and more important
cities
 that have a wide University education's offer.
Moreover
, in the metropolis, there are more chances for these
people
 to have fun because it is known that the nearer you get to city centres more are the possibilities to find clubs and disco bars where all the young society reunite to party altogether.
For example
, one destination
that is
 in the eye of many, is Amsterdam, a city that offers a wide and well-developed University system but
also
 a unique web of clubs that attracts students from all over the globe. While young males and females prefer
cities
, older
people
 tend to like small villages and towns because of their calm and tranquillity. It is known, indeed, those old
people
 who are near retirement tend to move out from the storm and the chaotic
life
 portrayed by the
cities
 to reach places where they can relax and enjoy the rest of their
life
 without worrying about anything.
This
 is because, it is likely, that these elders have spent all their time in
cities
 following their dreams. As
this
 journey finishes, they choose to live a less stressful
life
 in a farer and more isolated village where there aren't any problems that characterised the city's routine. To conclude,
although
cities
 and metropolises attract a lot of juveniles because of the many opportunities they offer, older
people
 tend to prefer smaller realities to retire after a busy and intense
life
.
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