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Some experts suggest people a method to solve the environmental problem is to increase the cost of fuel and all vehicles. To what extent do you agree with this point? And make comparision where relevant

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It is suggested by experts that the cost of
fuels
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 and all vehicles should be increased in response to the increasing severity of environmental problems. As far as I am concerned, I tend to believe
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 method definitely can benefit the whole society while potential negative influences
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 about by
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 can not be ignored. On the one hand, it is obvious that increasing the cost of
fuel
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 and all vehicles can resolve the issue of environmental preservation to some extent.
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, with the increasing
price
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 of
fuel
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, working
people
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 who usually drive private
cars
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 to commute between workplaces and home will be more likely to take public
transport
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 alternately.
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, the exhaust gas released by private
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 will be reduced, which somehow is a way to respond to
air
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 pollution issue.
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, the adjustment of
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 prices will potentially influence individuals' determination on purchasing a
car
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. If they figure out the
price
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 of owning a
car
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 and additional expense is much more expensive than taking public
transport
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, they would more likely to choose public
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 as trams, and buses, in order to avoid additional expenditure. And
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, fewer
cars
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 running on roads means less exhaust air release.
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, the disadvantages of increasing
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 costs and vehicles
price
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 cannot be ignored. The main reason for
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 view is that
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 kind of method will potentially lead
people
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 who regarded private
cars
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 as a must to experience financial burden, especially for those working individuals who live far away from workplaces and earn
low
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 income, as their disposable income is limited. Another reason for
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 view is that it is a fact that
people
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 who owned
cars
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 already will still choose to commute by
car
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 if the adjusted
fuel
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price
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 is still affordable. As they have already gotten used to commuting by
car
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 and insist on it, and
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, it does not make any difference to
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 group of
people
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 To sum up, I tend to believe
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 method is a feasible solution in response to air pollution.
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, some
people
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 will disadvantage from it and other appropriate methods
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 as subsidising
people
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 to take public
transport
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 and hybrid
cars
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 users would probably be an alternative in responding to
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 topic.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emissions
  • renewable energy
  • public transportation
  • alternative energy
  • economic impact
  • regressive measure
  • social mobility
  • incentives
  • green technology
  • consumption
  • environmental impact
  • commute
  • stricter regulations
  • disproportionately
  • sustainability
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