Nowadays, celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this has set a bad example for young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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these days actors and athletes are becoming role models for youngsters,for their lifestyle and to show off their achievements because ,wealth comes with most hard work ,without it nothing will get. henceforth

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strongly agree that by watching movies, or advertisements they are thinking that if they become famous

personality

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they can earn so much money by playing a

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of doing their wone business ,but we can not assume that all

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youngsters are the same ,some are want becoming

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as it's him/her passion ,

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bring the name to the country one thing is if one becomes a politician or athlete,

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,it gives recognition ,people identify where ever they go

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what they say suppose kids like to follow what their favourite person says they like to become the same suppose sachintendoolkar is favourite cricket player so most of the youth like to play the cricket ,PV Sindhu is famous tennis player ,nowadays kids

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learning it and the no is increased than before, it's not all the time bad in some cases it happens ,it

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perception of how they receive,

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cases it gives bad results in ,conclusion glamour world means for entertainment purposes it will be okay

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if we take into a personal life that will not work out ,we have to watch movies or sports for relaxation purposes,or sports should be considered as serious goals that give health as well as wealth to.

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superficial attributes
sensationalism
idolize
materialism
philanthropy
glamour
achievements
role models
humanitarian
influence
media portrayal
public adoration
celebrity worship
young individuals
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intellectual success
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When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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