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some peaple say thats in all levels of educations, From primary schools to unversities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practicals skills. do you agree or disagree?

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These days, There is no doubt ,most
students
 are lacking good practical
skills
. But what is the most effective method of dealing with issues of less practical
skills
 given by colleges? Some people believe that outside
skills
 are more important than studying academics. I completely disagree with
this
 idea and in
this
 essay, I will support my opinion with examples.
Firstly
, we want to know that schools and universities are not vocational training institutes. There are places are
student
 study subjects deeply and theoretically. Without deep
education
 getting practical is useless as a university
student
.
For example
, will take a
student
 who is following mechanical engineering at university, they are not a just engineer passing out and repairing machines. They should have the deep proficiency to see deeply and in advance about problems. Another reason why I disagree with basic educational institutes is not only to give
education
 but
also
 to build up
students
' personalities and other
skills
such
 as sports and entertainment,
Moreover
 all abilities of
students
 are identified by teachers who take care of all responsibilities of
students
. so I strongly believe they do not have enough time to give practical
education
.
On the other hand
, If they have enough practical knowledge when they leave college it will be very easy to find a job as well as get good remuneration from the beginning of their carrier. As an example a soft wear engineer with good practical
skills
 when he finishes higher
education
 which will be a huge support to his future carrier,
Otherwise
 he needs to spend another couple of years to become a professional engineer. In conclusion,
although
 it is a common belief that giving practical knowledge is essential , I believe its wrong
first
 need to get good deep theoretical
education
 as a university
student
 and most of the time practical
skills
 can develop through the vocational institute in which
students
 who are not granted to get high educations from universities,
This
 place they're getting less theory and more
skills
, Personally I think schools and universities should give good theoretical knowledge and develop other
skills
 and show them the correct path for life,
Then
 they will collect other requirements and make their life better.
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