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All parents want the best opportunities for their children. There are some people who think that schools should teach children skills but others think having a range of subjects is better for a children’s future. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#parents #opportunities #children #people #schools #skills #range #subjects #children’s #future
A few individuals believe that governments ought to add some curriculum in order to teach
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some
skills
, while another group of people think that teaching
children
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variety
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 of
subjects
 can be much more beneficial for their future
life
. In my opinion, teaching
children
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some
skills
 can be important for
children
's future. For most, teaching
children
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some important
subjects
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of
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youngsters
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 upcoming
life
. In most
of
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schools
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the schools
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, teachers
giving
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 overwhelmingly lot
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for
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 students with some necessary
subjects
 like mathematics, mother language, foreign languages and geography, and they are growing up with too much background
knowledge
 which can be vital for every job or study.
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, students are able to work with
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 salary whatever they wanted
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.
As a result
, they will
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 to retire with
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 pension which will be enough for
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life
 at
the
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 good moment
of
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 their
life
.
However
, I believe  that giving
knowledge
 about some vital
skills
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 to be key for
children
’s impending
life
.
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 all country has a wide range of jobs which
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demand some
skills
 from people who want to work in one of these jobs. A good example is that people may work as
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computer
programmer
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programmers
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 even if they do not study
in
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the
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university
on
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this
 field.
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,
government
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 should
to
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add some necessary
skills
 which can be interesting for students,
then
 they will able to be up-and-coming individuals duration of their
life
 with the help of these
skills
. To conclude,
although
these kind
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 of advantages of teaching a wide range of
subjects
, I feel that giving
knowledge
 about
skills
 can be far more worthwhile for
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 future
life
.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Practical skills
  • Financial literacy
  • Cognitive development
  • Critical thinking
  • Well-rounded education
  • Independence
  • Real-life situations
  • Cognitive development
  • Broader understanding
  • Ideal education system
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