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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extend do you agree or disagree withs this statement?

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It is argued that the authorities ought to invest more money in railways compared to
roads
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. I partially agree with
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 idea and think that adequate importance must be given to
transportation
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roads
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 by ministries in order to keep safe the public.
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, the
transportation
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 system in a city should be well-organized and the
roads
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 which are separated by trains, metros etc. should include safe properties.
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, the way that has some chuckholes or similar problems can cause traffic congestion and significant infrastructure problems.
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, when there is an issue on the car path near a school area, the municipality must solve
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 before occurring any accident. Because of that, even if there is a small problem on the side street,
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 is immediately determined and solved for the safety of
people
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 who live around there.
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, public
transportation
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 is more developed especially in bigger cities or metropolises, thereby reducing the traffic
jam
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 and speeding the arrivals,
people
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 should face fewer problems on the railways or tramways etc.
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, if the authorities encourage the several groups of
people
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 who use public
transportation
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 every day especially to get to their work, they must improve and spend more money on
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 system and catch the high technology for providing well-organized public transport.
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, the municipality of Istanbul is conducting different schemes
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 as building a new metro way between Asia and Europe continents to reduce traffic issues and transport chaos in
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 metropolis.
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, when the infrastructure facilities allow
locating
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 of beneficial paths for the public, the government must supply
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 opportunity to them.
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, it is considered that the ministry should provide more money for the railways than the
roads
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. In my opinion, all the
roads
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 are useful if they are organized and sustained in safe circumstances for
people
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 who utilize them per day.

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