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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#rubbish #governments #amount
We all know that recently the
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discard
 of used products has become a big
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environmental
enviroment
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environmental
 issue,
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consumerism
add
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 a lack of knowledge of how to
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discard
 and recycling is
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 main reason for
this
 large amount of rubbish,
This
 essay will discuss why it became a huge problem and how the
government
 can be involved to educate the population. On one hand, we are all focused on
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 new technologic products, new
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furniture
forniture
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furniture
 or even our
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 necessities, but on another hand, not that much worried about how to
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discard
 properly
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plastic containers, boxes, and other not biodegradable materials.
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, when we buy a single cellphone
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 a lot of garbage added to it, probably we have a good
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 properly,
however
, can be tricky to find an appropriate way to do that, maybe because there is no recycling
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 on the
neighborhood
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 or simply for disinformation. The
government
 should be aware of the
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discard
 problem and provide different ways to help society.
Firstly
 we all have to be properly informed about how to separate the recycled materials from
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biologic
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 garbage, it can be solved by
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 in all ways possible like tv, radio, magazines, etc.
Secondly
, they have to provide proper places to centralize and collect recyclable materials, and it should be easy and
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accessible
acessible
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accessible
 for everyone. Humanity can always be influenceable by good examples there are countries
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 the
government
 implanted strategies to minimize some
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 problems and by
this
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 the population started to take care of the overall community.
By
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 the
government
 and population effort, using all strategies available the rubbish problem can be at least minimized or totally solved.
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