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Are we too dependent on antibiotics? To what extend do you agree or disagree.

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Do you know
antibiotics
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? What it is ? It is a Greek word meaning "AGAINST LIFE".
In other words
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, an antibiotic is a drug that kills
bacteria
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. Many people around the world
use
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 it to prevent
any
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dangerous diseases Lately, people have been using
antibiotics
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 for everything. It affects good for us, but sometimes it is wrong. We are becoming too dependent on
antibiotics
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. If we
use
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 it properly according to the doctor's instruction. It will give us good results. One of the main advantages of using
antibiotics
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 is that they protect our bodies and kill
bacteria
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. Without
bacteria
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 we are healthy. Apart from
this
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, it's easy to
use
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. Size and shape are very suitable.
This
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 can give you a chance to
use
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 it anywhere.
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, if we overuse
antibiotics
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, it risks destroying even our beneficial
bacteria
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. There are two types of
bacteria
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 in our bodies. Beneficial and non-beneficial
bacteria
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. If the beneficial
bacteria
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 die, we get a disease.
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, it creates conditions for the formation of
fung
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fungi
. There is nothing simple to
use
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 in an emergency. The only one is
antibiotics
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. You have flu. Do you drink some fluids and take a rest? Or do you reach for the
antibiotics
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? Most of us choose the
second
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 one. The answer is probably obvious. That's why we are so dependent on
antibiotics
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. All in all, it seems to me
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 partisan. The fact that we are becoming too dependent on
antibiotics
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 is bringing us a tendency to move toward something ready without doing something or any risk, but it is
also
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 right to always
use
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 it. Because
antibiotics
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 have good effects.

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