IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4

Task 2 Academic Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school.

#people #children #home #child #development #school
Although
home schooling
Correct your spelling
homeschooling
show examples
 is not a topic
that is
 generally discussed in Brazil
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 since it is not a typical way of studying in the country, actually it is possible that
this
 isn't even a possibility, it is common in other
Correct your spelling
countries
coutries
Correct your spelling
countries
 and it's
a
Change the article
an
show examples
 important topic to be discussed. It is common knowledge that social interaction is very important to
children
Change noun form
children's
show examples
 development and going to school,
specially
Replace the word
especially
show examples
 in the
first
 years of the
children
's
life
Replace the word
lives
show examples
, is a very good way to promote
these social interaction
Change the determiner
this social interaction
these social interactions
show examples
. With that said, it is
also
 known that each person is unique and
react
Correct subject-verb agreement
reacts
show examples
different
Replace the word
differently
show examples
 to
the
Remove the article
apply
show examples
each situation and in some cases, going to school can cause negative effects on kids and teenagers. The most important thing is to pay attention to
children
 and see how is it going the individual
Correct your spelling
experience
experince
Correct your spelling
experiences
 of each of them. If some of them are disliking the experience, having a bad performance in classes, not being able to make friends or
any
Add a missing verb
have any
show examples
 other problem
Correct your spelling
that
tha
Correct your spelling
that
 may happen, their cases should be looked at individually and with the help of school advisors,
psicologists
Correct your spelling
psychologists
 and the people responsible for the child or teenager
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 must work together to choose what is the best option for that person. As was said before, the most important thing is to look at every child as an individual, and not try to decide which one of the two types of education is best for kids in general. The main goal should be the
children
 well being and what works better for them.
Submitted by julia_mrp9 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: