In some parts of the world traditional festivals and celebrations have disappeared or are disappearing. What problems is this causing? What measures could be taken to counter this situation?

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ways to connect
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so that they can share cultures and societal
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which leads to peace and euphony. In current times, it is noted that
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celebrations and festive events.
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that cuts off ourselves from social
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as traditional functions. Due to rapid urbanization as well as excess involvement with new things and technologies, individuals are detached from their tradition and
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lead to a sharp decline in harmony among
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and other members of
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society.
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from rural areas move to cities for better job opportunities, but they leave their culture and ethics.
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long detachment
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family and society results in
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of traditional festivals. As we all know,
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making a living is essential for any human being, but it is still required to carry on with our
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and ethics. We can adopt various methods to continue celebrating various festivals the way they are celebrated by our parents or grandparents
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as we can organize functions in our apartment building to spread the customary festive means. Like in the ongoing Football World Cup Qatar has brilliantly displayed its
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between our lives and tradition. To wrap up,
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want to add that there is
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for us to get in touch with our ethics and
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so that we can deliver
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future generations so that they can
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learn to live in peace and harmony.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traditional festivals
  • heritage
  • cultural identity
  • folklore
  • cultural tourism
  • intergenerational
  • homogenization
  • commercialization
  • intangible cultural heritage
  • community engagement
  • awareness
  • revitalize
  • cultural diversity
  • educational programs
  • governmental support
  • logistical support
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