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Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test the safety of other products. Some people argue that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer, while others are in favour of them because of their benefits to humanity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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 present time, researchers are experimenting
animals
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with animals
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 with the aim of finding new drugs
to
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safety
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the safety
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 of other products. A few
people
 believe that these
experiments
 can be
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a brutal
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 way because of suffering
animals
 and think that
this
 kind of
experiments
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 ought to
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, while another group of
people
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 about animal
experiments
. In my opinion, experimenting
animals
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 can be
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a good
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 way to save
the
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mankind from
dangerous
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illness
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. For most, experimenting
animals
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on animals
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 seem to be
much
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suffering
as a result
 of some challenging
test
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tests
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 on
animals
. These individuals always try to do something
what
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 they can
do
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to save
animals
 from
such
experiments
 because of their
loves
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 for
animals
.
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, in
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Indonesia
country
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people
are look
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  after
animals
 duration of their life and even they are sleeping with them,
Thus
 on
this
 country experimenting
animals
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with animals
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 prohibited and even if someone
do
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 harm to
animals
, they may
to
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have
high
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 penalty, as a consequence of breaking rules of
country
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the country
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.
However
, I believe that testing
animals
on
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the
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dangerous
experiments
 can be much helpful to avoid some risks which would be dangerous for mankind.
That is
 to say, scientists should test
animals
 to create some medicine before
put
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 the life of humans
on
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these kind
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 of risky
experiments
. A good example is that
on
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 the
COVID 19
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COVID-19
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 period, researchers
was
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 experimented on rats to create
vaccine
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a vaccine
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 for viruses, because
of
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this
 animal has a good organism which is almost
same
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with
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as
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 humans,
therefore
,
on
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this
 kind of moment, researchers should use these
animals
 to experiment
instead
 of putting the life of humans to the danger. To conclude,
although
 these
advantageous
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 reasons
of
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animals
 why
they
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should not experiment
, I
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 feel that in order to save
the
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humanity,
animals
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animal
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 testing can be
good
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 solution regardless of testing
people
on
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in
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 the experiment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Ethics
  • Morality
  • Vivisection
  • In vivo testing
  • Cruelty-free
  • Animal welfare
  • Biomedical research
  • Toxicology
  • Sentience
  • Compassionate
  • Humane
  • Speciesism
  • In vitro
  • Alternative methods
  • Pharmacology
  • Clinical trials
  • Bioethics
  • Animal rights
  • Pain threshold
  • Efficacy
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