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Some people thinl that all unversity students should study whatever they like . Other believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in thw future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Many young
people
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the
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university to study the
specialty
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 they like. Still another group of individuals is of the opinion that
students
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 should continue studying in the profession they need in the
future
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. In
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 and give my opinion. On the one hand, some
students
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 believe that they should be free to choose the studies they want. From an educational point of view,
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 will allow young
people
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 to become experts in their professions in the
future
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The student
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Student
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 should not be forced into subjects they do not want. Maybe they should be guided in the direction they like. In my opinion, if a
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students
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 is interested in a subject, he can be trained in
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 direction and in the
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 he can get a good higher education and
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 have a good career.
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Also
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 they can get
higher
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 job in the
future
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.
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, another group of
people
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 believe that technology and certain sciences will play an important role in the
future
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. They emphasize to
students
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 that these subjects are important in the
future
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, I do not believe that these subjects are important because
people
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 do not like their majors and they are not able to study their professions. I think that all areas should be developed. Because society is made up of different departments. If every student chooses a career of their choice, the doors will open to improve our standard of living. In conclusion
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students
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 should choose careers for which they are
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 and capable. But one should not forget to study a certain field in the
future
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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