Some people believe that entertainers are paid too much and their impact on society is negative, while others disagree and believe that they deserve the money that they make because of their positive effects on society. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

The entertainment industry is
one
of the largest sectors in all
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the world. Some think that the
people
who work in that industry earn too much money considering their bad influence on society, and I agree.
Others
,
however
, believe that their positive
impact
on
others
is worth the money that they are paid. On the
one
hand, there is no doubt that
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business is an enormous and unfairly
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sector.
In addition
to that, members of it do not add real value, compared to
others
like,
for instance
, education workers.
Although
in some countries teachers live with unreasonable wages, their responsibility
,
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is extremely valuable for
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better
people
. Whereas a singer can earn double their yearly salary from
one
concert. The other important point is, for a balanced and equal society, the difference between income levels must not be very high. Regardless
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their contribution, no
one
should make billions of dollars that easily, because that imbalance does have a significant negative
impact
on societies.
On the other hand
, some
people
think that entertainers’ contribution to
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modern life is worth the money they earn. It can be understood that for many
people
, watching a movie or going to a concert is irreplaceable with other activities;
therefore
, they think that their positive
impact
is crucial for a significant proportion of
people
.
In addition
to that, celebrities do compromise their privacy and freedom with being known by many
others
. In exchange
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that, they do deserve a comfortable life with significantly better paychecks. In conclusion, despite their minimal contribution with their work to the
people
and sacrifice from their private life; I believe that their
impact
is far from being positive and they are not paid fairly or balanced with
others
.
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